You have a poem that has some interesting ideas or rhythms, but it’s just not making it? Here are some things I do when I revise a poem to work:
Take some of your lines, split them down the middle, and regroup them e.g.:
Here are the shelves of unread books
An immigrant who stands on the edge of the forest
becomes: Here are the shelves on the edge of the forest
An immigrant who stands on unread books.
Or try to take a poem and erase words, e.g.
In first grade
We learned the names of dandelions and birch trees?
Forgot them & relearned them.
They didn’t make much sense to us,
because we were in New York City
where there weren’t many flowers or trees.
Trilliums, sweetgum trees,
New York City,
No flowers or trees.
Try rewriting your poem from a different viewpoint:
Two brothers planted a sequoia in the orchard one afternoon
becomes: All afternoon my brother and I worked in the orchard planting a sequoia.
When I wrote my new book, Touch My Head Softly, I went through many revises:
What do you do to revise?
I will be posting on Thursdays, and on Tuesdays, if I have an announcement.
My new poetry collection can be viewed here:
Here is the link to my book on Goodreads:
I am a writer and a swimmer and really related to this quote from Mary Oliver, the great Pulitzer-Prize winning poet. During this dark pandemic period, I find both writing and swimming have sustained me. I’m grateful I get to reserve a lane at my gym and swim six days a week (never on Sunday.) I have also been writing through this pandemic and I feel like it has been a lifesaver. It gives me purpose.
I wrote a collection of poems about my experiences with my partner, who died of Alzheimer’s in his sixties. I feel grateful that Finishing Line is publishing this work and it will be out in the world. The work around the publication, particularly, has sustained me during this dark time.
This is the link to my book at Finishing Line:
This is the link to my book on Goodreads:
ISBN Paperback: 978-1-716-4666
Set in the Santa Clara Valley during the turbulent sixties and seventies, REAL ESTATE is the story of how a bucolic agricultural valley is transformed into the iconic Silicon Valley.
As acres of apricot orchards are converted into suburban subdivisions, families flock to the area. Air Force pilot Joe Jackson moves his family to Sunnyvale soon after the Hopkins build their dream house. Harriet Jackson, her father’s eyes and ears, finds herself living next door to Bobby Hopkins, aspiring circus performer and math whiz. They share a side-yard fence, but the worlds they live in differ radically. A shared love of the Beatles and the loss of the inspiring young President Kennedy bring them together in an unlikely friendship, but their family’s differences soon tear them apart. While Harriet struggles to fulfill her family obligations. Bobby builds a computer in his garage.
They meet again as adults, but by then everything has changed. In the electric valley, both Harriet and Bobby learn that family is not always destiny and houses are sometimes more than a home.
eBook: ISBN: 978-1-005-23640-3
6″ x 9″, 186 pages. Printed on archival quality paper.
For any of us who watched the insurrection of the Capitol Building in Washington, D.C. last week, the words of Amanda Gorman, the inaugural poet, rings true. This poem was, ultimately, optimistic, portending a better future. Poetry can speak to us like nothing else when times are dark.
I wrote a collection of poetry after my partner died of Alzheimer’s Disease. It was a very dark time in my life. My partner, a brilliant mathematician, deteriorated quickly, leaving me in darkness. The writing of the poetry helped me to process what happened. I have been working on Touch My Head Softly with my publisher, Finishing Line Press, to finish the process. It has given me purpose through the pandemic.
Here is the link to the book at Finishing Line:
Here is the link to the book on Goodreads:
I can’t listen to music with words, as it interferes with my word process, but wordless music, classic or jazz, can sometimes enhance my writing. A Bach piece with choral work or John Coltrane’s horn can bring me there.
I guess combining art forms is usually a good thing. I’ve happily done readings of my poetry in art galleries. I think the art enhances the reading. How do you use the arts to enhance your writing?
My upcoming book, Touch My Head Softly is due out in early 2021;
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A friend of mine was recently asked to read at a book club meeting. The group had adopted her book to read that month, and since she was local, they asked her to come and read excerpts.
In Seattle, a group of poets formed a group called “A Poet at the Table,”where different area poets did readings at local book clubs.
Do you have any experience with book clubs?
My new book, Touch My Head Softly, is about my partner having Alzheimer’s Disease.
I guess this might interest an Alzheimer’s support group. Do you have any experience with Book Clubs?
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Hello from Amherst,MA.
It’s always nice to have your work appreciated so I thought I’d share some reviews I’ve received in the last week for my upcoming book, Touch My Head Softly, on Goodreads. , Thank you to everyone who continues to support my writing and I hope to share more positive reviews in the weeks ahead. Have a great day wherever in the world you are.
“In Touch My Head Softly. Eileen P. Kennedy has written an extraordinarily book about the death of a male lover taken in middle age with Alzheimer’s Disease.” —Preston M. Browning, Jr., Director, Wellspring House Writer’s Retreat.
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